This is a nice poem, with lots of repetition and lots of good line. Lots of great poems have this style of a repeated phrase to begin a line and one to close it too. I think the other two, often forgotten, astronauts, Edwin "Buzz" Aldrin and Michael Collins, were very brave too. Had you heard of them before?
I'd love to know if you had ideas for more of the poem, I'm curious now, to find out what he discovered on the moon in the poem.
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ReplyDeleteKia ora Koshik,
ReplyDeleteThis is a nice poem, with lots of repetition and lots of good line. Lots of great poems have this style of a repeated phrase to begin a line and one to close it too. I think the other two, often forgotten, astronauts, Edwin "Buzz" Aldrin and Michael Collins, were very brave too. Had you heard of them before?
I'd love to know if you had ideas for more of the poem, I'm curious now, to find out what he discovered on the moon in the poem.
See you in the comments.
Daniel :)